Very nice draft here, Lindsay. A few questions to help you revise: 1) Is the hyphen necessary? Why or why not? 2) Should University be capitalized? Why or why not?
Looking forward to reading the story. Have you seen a lot of credit card companies on campus?
I like this lede because you have a good start that draws you in and you let us know in the very beginning that the University is contributing to the problem.
this is a good idea because your presenting a specific problem. im excited to see where this goes and i guess thats really the whole point of a good lede. so yay
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Very nice draft here, Lindsay. A few questions to help you revise: 1) Is the hyphen necessary? Why or why not? 2) Should University be capitalized? Why or why not?
Looking forward to reading the story. Have you seen a lot of credit card companies on campus?
I like this lede because you have a good start that draws you in and you let us know in the very beginning that the University is contributing to the problem.
this is a good idea because your presenting a specific problem. im excited to see where this goes and i guess thats really the whole point of a good lede. so yay
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